r5314 - developers/werner/openness

[werner at docs.openmoko.org]

Author: werner
Date: 2009-07-23 14:47:28 +0200 (Thu, 23 Jul 2009)
New Revision: 5314

Modified:
   developers/werner/openness/oshwdr.tex
Log:
Small corrections of style and scope of participation.

- replaced double "applying" with "applying ... in keeping with"
- put license names in italics, to make it clear what the exact names are
- added "e.g." to indicate that reviews are only one way in which developers
  can participate



Modified: developers/werner/openness/oshwdr.tex
===================================================================
--- developers/werner/openness/oshwdr.tex	2009-07-22 20:10:33 UTC (rev 5313)
+++ developers/werner/openness/oshwdr.tex	2009-07-23 12:47:28 UTC (rev 5314)
@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@
 
 \title{Open Source Hardware --- Disclosure Requisites}
 \author{Werner Almesberger \\ \url{werner at openmoko.org}}
-\date{July 22, 2009}
+\date{July 23, 2009}
 
 \parindent=0pt
 \parskip=8pt
@@ -60,8 +60,8 @@
 among projects.
 
 Open Source Hardware is an approach that aims to enhance quality and
-value of hardware products by applying an open design process, by applying
-best practices of Open Source Software development.
+value of hardware products by applying an open design process, in keeping
+with best practices of Open Source Software development.
 
 This document outlines the characteristics and benefits of Open Source
 Hardware and explains the requisites resulting from this on technical
@@ -80,9 +80,9 @@
     permitting use and further modification free from royalties.
 \end{itemize}
 
-Examples of Open licenses include the General Public License (GPL)%
-\footnote{\url{http://www.gnu.org/copyleft/gpl.html}} and the Creative
-Commons Attribution -- Share Alike license (CC-BY-SA)%
+Examples of Open licenses include the {\em General Public License} (GPL)%
+\footnote{\url{http://www.gnu.org/copyleft/gpl.html}} and the {\em Creative
+Commons Attribution -- Share Alike} license (CC-BY-SA)%
 \footnote{\url{http://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/}}.
 
 
@@ -93,7 +93,7 @@
 
 \begin{itemize}
   \item Enables prospective buyers and developers to participate in
-    ensuring high quality of the product through reviews. This also
+    ensuring high quality of the product, e.g., through reviews. This also
     helps to accelerate the produce development process.
   \item Permits prospective buyers and VARs to conduct a thorough and
     honest evaluation of the product design, improving their ability